Oct 6, 2013

Heartbreaking confusion - 55 fiction

He had come to talk to her for the moment they shared. He had felt something special and wanted to ask if she felt the same.  He heard her talking and paused. She said “It was just bliss”. He mistook it for “It was just a kiss”.

He thought he got his answer and left.



This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda

This weeks prompt - 

She said ____. He mistook it to be ____.

The words used in the blanks have to rhyme and your post should revolve around the confusion thus created as a result of the miscommunication.


46 comments:

  1. Enjoyed reading. Thank god it was not a miss :)

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  2. Bliss and kiss. nice reading yr F-55er.

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  3. Nice 55er. Sad when people jump to conclusions so quickly.
    dropping by from the WoW prompt.

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  4. Such a nice short story with great effect

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  5. Wow! That's a nice one for the prompt! :)

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  6. Nice take on the prompt, interesting how similar sounding words can make a world of difference when used interchangeably, right!!!

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  7. Hahaha...I feel bad for the poor guy :P

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  8. Awww this must be something later huh? :D :D

    Richa

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    1. ?? This wasn't part of the story...

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  9. 55 words...well written :) poor chap though :(

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  10. you are quite good in 55Fiction :) good one again

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  11. great entry for the WOW prompt


    http://amarnaik.wordpress.com/2013/10/06/confusion-created-as-a-result-of-the-miscommunication/

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  12. The last line makes me sad. :) But a great post.

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  13. One simple word heard wrong and a love story ended . sad =(
    Lovely 55er ! :-)

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  14. A blissful kiss....nice post

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  15. Well... I almost wished he had said, 'Beg your pardon?'

    Arvind Passey
    www.passey.info

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  16. Bliss and Kiss..Simple and Lovely in 55.. :)

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  17. Oh! Bechara! :P

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  18. Now that's a really sad ending to the bliss... :P

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  19. ye bahut bura hua. Ab wo kahan nayi girlfriend dhhondhta firega.... :'(

    Btw, a very good 55er sugandha

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  20. poor chap!

    Btw, nice 55er sugandha!

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  21. Why do these guys always hear everything upside down?

    -Nice take on the prompt! :)

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    1. That's why they are boys. Thank you :)

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