Oct 6, 2013

Heartbreaking confusion - 55 fiction

He had come to talk to her for the moment they shared. He had felt something special and wanted to ask if she felt the same.  He heard her talking and paused. She said “It was just bliss”. He mistook it for “It was just a kiss”.

He thought he got his answer and left.



This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda

This weeks prompt - 

She said ____. He mistook it to be ____.

The words used in the blanks have to rhyme and your post should revolve around the confusion thus created as a result of the miscommunication.


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41 comments:

  1. NischalaOctober 6, 2013 at 1:38 AM

    Enjoyed reading. Thank god it was not a miss :)

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  2. kalpana solsiOctober 6, 2013 at 1:55 AM

    Bliss and kiss. nice reading yr F-55er.

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  3. SuzyOctober 6, 2013 at 7:27 AM

    Nice 55er. Sad when people jump to conclusions so quickly.
    dropping by from the WoW prompt.

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  4. KParthasarathiOctober 6, 2013 at 9:44 AM

    Such a nice short story with great effect

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  5. Shilpa GargOctober 6, 2013 at 10:56 AM

    Wow! That's a nice one for the prompt! :)

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  6. JairamOctober 6, 2013 at 1:45 PM

    Nice take on the prompt, interesting how similar sounding words can make a world of difference when used interchangeably, right!!!

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  7. AnonymousOctober 6, 2013 at 3:36 PM

    Hahaha...I feel bad for the poor guy :P

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  8. Richa SinghOctober 6, 2013 at 5:17 PM

    Awww this must be something later huh? :D :D

    Richa

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  9. preethiOctober 6, 2013 at 6:41 PM

    55 words...well written :) poor chap though :(

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  10. Anmol RawatOctober 6, 2013 at 8:29 PM

    you are quite good in 55Fiction :) good one again

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  11. AnonymousOctober 6, 2013 at 8:55 PM

    great entry for the WOW prompt


    http://amarnaik.wordpress.com/2013/10/06/confusion-created-as-a-result-of-the-miscommunication/

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  12. SakshiOctober 6, 2013 at 9:20 PM

    The last line makes me sad. :) But a great post.

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  13. RatOctober 6, 2013 at 10:23 PM

    wonderful 55er :)

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  14. NajmunOctober 6, 2013 at 11:00 PM

    One simple word heard wrong and a love story ended . sad =(
    Lovely 55er ! :-)

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  15. AnonymousOctober 6, 2013 at 11:10 PM

    A blissful kiss....nice post

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  16. Arvind PasseyOctober 7, 2013 at 12:55 AM

    Well... I almost wished he had said, 'Beg your pardon?'

    Arvind Passey
    www.passey.info

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  17. AnonymousOctober 7, 2013 at 1:01 AM

    Bliss and Kiss..Simple and Lovely in 55.. :)

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  18. IndraniOctober 7, 2013 at 9:03 AM

    Good take on the prompt. :)

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  19. AnonymousOctober 7, 2013 at 1:38 PM

    Oh! Bechara! :P

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  20. RinayaOctober 7, 2013 at 3:41 PM

    Now that's a really sad ending to the bliss... :P

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  21. Ritesh AgarwalOctober 9, 2013 at 12:16 AM

    ye bahut bura hua. Ab wo kahan nayi girlfriend dhhondhta firega.... :'(

    Btw, a very good 55er sugandha

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  22. Aruna MallaOctober 10, 2013 at 12:24 PM

    poor chap!

    Btw, nice 55er sugandha!

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  23. AnonymousOctober 19, 2013 at 3:29 AM

    Why do these guys always hear everything upside down?

    -Nice take on the prompt! :)

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